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Post by spaniel_lover on Tue Oct 19, 2010 2:04 pm

Hellow everybody this is my web site



http://leonniesdoggrooming.weebly.com/index.html

can you let me know what you all think

thanks
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Post by C.C on Tue Oct 19, 2010 7:14 pm

Hi Spaniel lover I love the dogs eyes looking at you, and overall it's a good informative site. If you don't mind me being picky about it then all I would change if I were you is , remove the noticable muzzle on the table of the white dog's aftershot and check the spelling errors .One obvious mistake is dont instead of don't. Some more pictures of dogs would be nice- I love looking at dogs Smile
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Post by yapidiyap on Tue Oct 19, 2010 10:05 pm

On page FAQ, generally has 2 L's. Also accustomed has 2 C's. Stressful has 2 s's and 1 L. Stressful is spelt incorrectly twice on this page and both times in a different way. Alot is incorrect it should be separated and spelt 'a lot'. Where the heading says, I think my dog has fleas, (this is not a question so therefore does not require a question mark) the response to this statement needs a full stop on the end. Co-operation requires a hyphen in it. Dogs larger than (not then) the breed standard. The word shortime should be 2 words ie, short time. On the top of the pages (I'm not sure what you call them. Tags?) the words Home and Contact should have a capital letter so that you have consistency. The page 'Why grooming is important'. Don't requires an apostrophe. The word painful has 1 L not 2. Dog's coat requires an apostrophe between the g and s. That is on the page twice. Also dog's movement. Same, that is also on the page twice. On page 'My approach to dog grooming' the word won't needs an apostrophe. Also, there needs to be a paragraph space before 'I only book one client...' I hope this helps you. Proofreading is part of my trade.
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Post by Susanne on Tue Oct 19, 2010 11:52 pm

apart from what has already been mentioned. The front page - personally I would like to see all the information on my screen without having to scroll down, the other pages have alot of information and photos thereby justifying scrolling, your tabs are along the top so thats a bonus.
You don't need to repeat yourself, remove the "my name is leonnie briggs,'

Welcome to Dog Grooming
by Leonnie Briggs

I am a home based dog groomer, located in Geelong.
Welcome to my website, feel free to have a browse around. (how about "Hope you enjoy my website, feel free to have a browse around" so that you aren't repeating the "welcome to"
and have it fit on your screen without scrolling.

also I would perhaps remove the dogface banner from the pages which have photos on them, its abit much. You also need to personalise it, show a photo of you or you and a groomed customer, at the very least on the contact page.
also, You've done a great job, good on you for getting it up!
JMHO Smile

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Post by Fluffy on Wed Oct 20, 2010 7:10 am

Going to put Yap... on speed dial as I am a shocking speller LOL.

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Re: my web site

Post by spaniel_lover on Wed Oct 27, 2010 8:25 am

Thank you all for your input

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Re: my web site

Post by Nikki68 on Thu Feb 16, 2012 9:06 pm

Great site, I too love the dogs eyes!

As per one post already, I too am an editor by trade, and you should also hyphenate home-based before 'dog groomer'.

Also, list comma before 'and' should not be included in Australian texts only US.

Not sure cooperation is hyphenated anymore though, think modern convention is not to include it. But is a personal preference.


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